Vitamin D Deficiency is Associated with Metabolic Syndrome

Review Data

Purpose and Significance of Study: This study attempted to determine the strength of association between vitamin D and metabolic syndrome, insulin resistance and diabetes mellitus in the general US population.

Fit with Scope of Journal: The manuscript is of very high interest for the Journal of Diabetes, Metabolism and its Complications.

o   There are some minor errors (already corrected in the galley proof), which are listed below –

 

The common errors are –

·       Omission of articles, e.g., “the” before “study” in the 1^st sentence of Methods in the Abstract, “a” after “is” in the 1^st sentence of the 2^nd paragraph of the Introduction, and so on.

·       Omission of “,”, e.g., before “including”, after “however”, after “e.g.” and many other places.

·       Overuse of “,”, e.g., after “(MetS)” in the 1^st sentence of the 1^st paragraph of the Introduction, after “collections” in the 4^th sentence of the 1^st paragraph of Subject and Methods, and so on.

·       Usage of incorrect prepositions, e.g., “for” after “risk” instead of “of” in the 6^th sentence of the 2^nd paragraph of Subject characteristics under Results, “with” after “related” instead of “to” in the 2^nd sentence of the next paragraph, and so on.

·       “Well-known”, “one-third”, and “pro-inflammatory” must be hyphenated.

·       “Lifestyle” must be written as a single word.

 

The others are –

In the Abstract –

  Under Background –

·       In the last sentence, “versus” must be replaced with “and”.

  Under Conclusion –

·       “indicate” must be replaced with “indicates”.

In the Introduction –

  In the 1^st paragraph –

·       In the last sentence, “atherosclerosis” is misspelled.

  In the 3^rd paragraph –

·       In the 3^rd sentence, “kidney” is misspelled.

·       In the 4^th sentence, “depend” must be replaced with “depends”, and “shine” must be removed.

·       In the 5^th sentence, “time” must be removed.

·       In the 7^th sentence, “but” must be removed.

In Subject and Methods –

  In the 2^nd paragraph –

·       In the 2^nd sentence, “were” must be replaced with “was”.

  In the 5^th paragraph –

·       In the 3^rd sentence, “,” after “continuous” and “;” after “variables” must be removed.

·       In the last sentence, “,” must be replaced with “,”, and “remarkably” must instead be placed after “differ”.

In the Results –

  Under Subject Characteristics –

  In the 3^rd paragraph –

·       In the 3^rd sentence, “minimal” must be replaced with “minimum”.

·       In the 8^th sentence, “generally” must instead be placed before “had”.

  In the 4^th paragraph –

·       In the 2^nd sentence, “those” must be removed, and “having” must be replaced with “with”.

·       In the last sentence, “likely” must be replaced with “than”.

  In the 10^th paragraph –

·       In the 8^th sentence, “shade” must be replaced with “sheds”.

In the Discussion –

  In the 1^st paragraph –

·       In the 2^nd sentence, “,” before “however” must be replaced with “;”, and “be also” must be replaced with “also be”.

·       In the 3^rd sentence, “selected” must be replaced with “select”.

  In the 4^th paragraph –

·       In the last sentence, “, thus” must be replaced with “; thus,”.

  In the 5^th paragraph –

·       In the 1^st sentence, “is” after “D₃” must be removed.

·       In the 2^nd sentence, “source being” must be removed.

  In the 7^th paragraph –

·       In the 1^st sentence, “provides a support over” must be replaced with “weighs in on”, and “as to” must be replaced with “of”.

  In the 8^th paragraph –

·       In the 3^rd sentence, “was” must be removed.

Note: We suggest the author to modify the article title as a very similar article title is already published and this could lead to potential conflict.

Author Info

Alemu Fite Luchen Wang Berhane Seyoum

Corresponding Author

Berhane Seyoum
Wayne State University School of Medicine, Detroit, Michigan, USA

Article Info

Article Type

Research Article

Publication history

Received: Mon 11, May 2020
Accepted: Thu 28, May 2020
Published: Thu 30, Jul 2020

Copyright

© 2023 Berhane Seyoum. This is an open-access article distributed under the terms of the Creative Commons Attribution License, which permits unrestricted use, distribution, and reproduction in any medium, provided the original author and source are credited. Hosting by Science Repository.
DOI: 10.31487/j.JDMC.2020.01.03